krisomniac: (spn evil sam)
krisomniac ([personal profile] krisomniac) wrote2007-06-03 06:49 pm
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Supernatural drabble: Rope. Chalk. Lighter. Beads (G, gen, 100 words)

Just to get the mojo flowing.

Title: Rope. Chalk. Lighter. Beads.


Wasn't supposed to end like this--

A blaze of glory, guns and guts and the rest of the world be damned. Talons and teeth, angry sprits and things that crawl out of the dark. Holding the retreat for frightened children, the wrong fight, in the wrong bar, on the wrong night. Not--

Dean's standing in the crossroads, unarmed.

All around him nails bite the dirt, low growls and huffing breaths circle.

Too calm, Dean waits.

Not supposed to end like--

Sam watches from the brush, fingers each item in his pocket-- rope, chalk, lighter, beads-- and smiles at the dark.

[identity profile] iamstealthyone.livejournal.com 2007-06-03 11:04 pm (UTC)(link)
Ooh, nice. I really like how you used so few words to create tension and the overall mood, and I loved Sam's little smile at the end. Go, Sam, go!

I especially enjoyed this bit:

A blaze of glory, guns and guts and the rest of the world be damned. Talons and teeth, angry sprits and things that crawl out of the dark. Holding the retreat for frightened children, the wrong fight, in the wrong bar, on the wrong stormy night.

Great imagery there.

[identity profile] krisomniac.livejournal.com 2007-06-05 11:15 am (UTC)(link)
:) thanky! Sam's so gonna kick serious ass. ♥

[identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com 2007-06-03 11:06 pm (UTC)(link)
Dean, too calm. Sam FTW!!

[identity profile] krisomniac.livejournal.com 2007-06-05 11:15 am (UTC)(link)
eeE!!! Dee!!! I can't even WAIT for next season, OMG.

[identity profile] lyra-wing.livejournal.com 2007-06-03 11:20 pm (UTC)(link)
Awww, Sammy!

I love this. How can you people drabble so well? Tell a complete story in 100 words? I am jealous.

[identity profile] krisomniac.livejournal.com 2007-06-05 11:16 am (UTC)(link)
ZOMg, I am so not talented at this, but it's hella fun to mess around. :D

[identity profile] ignipes.livejournal.com 2007-06-04 12:06 am (UTC)(link)
Oooh, that's shivery and wonderful.

[identity profile] krisomniac.livejournal.com 2007-06-05 11:17 am (UTC)(link)
eee! Thanky! :D

[identity profile] rosekay.livejournal.com 2007-06-04 12:16 am (UTC)(link)
What a moment. I love this, the shifting sense of creepiness, and Sam, so purposed. Hot. :)

[identity profile] krisomniac.livejournal.com 2007-06-05 11:18 am (UTC)(link)
OMG, the next season finale is going to WIN. and thanky!

[identity profile] girlmostlikely.livejournal.com 2007-06-04 12:52 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, yay! This is... it feels portentous, you know? The deep breath before the plunge, so to speak.

Lovely stuff, honey. *hugs you tight*

[identity profile] krisomniac.livejournal.com 2007-06-05 11:22 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you!! *twirls*

[identity profile] obeetaybee.livejournal.com 2007-06-04 12:57 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, yay! I love this, Kris. You've got a whole world right there in just one little drabble.

[identity profile] krisomniac.livejournal.com 2007-06-05 11:26 am (UTC)(link)
thanky!!
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[identity profile] schneestern.livejournal.com 2007-06-04 10:39 am (UTC)(link)
This is truly wonderful and I'm in love with how well you describe it all with so little words. I also love the title a lot ;)

[identity profile] krisomniac.livejournal.com 2007-06-05 11:27 am (UTC)(link)
awww. thank you so much! Just kinda playing with this drabble thing...

[identity profile] december21st.livejournal.com 2007-06-05 04:25 am (UTC)(link)
You write amazing drabbles. Really.

[identity profile] krisomniac.livejournal.com 2007-06-05 11:27 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you!!

[identity profile] amchara.livejournal.com 2007-06-06 05:18 am (UTC)(link)
Yay, fic! :)

I like it-- alot conveyed in few words. I especially liked the last line.

[identity profile] krisomniac.livejournal.com 2007-06-06 12:16 pm (UTC)(link)
hee! thank you. I like this one way better than the other I tried. Drabbles are kinda hit and miss, you know?

And Sam so kicks ass.